Thread:Introductory sentences problematic (1)

I find these two introductory sentences


 * "Copyright is a branch or subsection of intellectual property law which aims to protect the outputs of intellect through for example, trademarks, patents, designs, software licenses and copyright. This unit is restricted to providing an introduction to copyright law."

problematic and completely superfluous:


 * 1) Using the term "intellectual property" directs students' thinking on these matters in the direction desired by those who oppose digital freedom and the principles of OER outlined in this course. See this essay and other terms to avoid (including IP).
 * 2) The title of the page and its name make it clear what it is about.

How about starting with something to arouse interest such as


 * In this digital age, the default, © copyright all rights reserved (applicable in most countries) contradicts the original purpose of copyright: to promote progress in science and the useful arts - a public good. The purpose is not to enrich publishers or authors, or to grant them undue influence on development and distribution of culture (Lessig, 2004).